Tuesday, September 4, 2012

I found your absence wanting



I found your absence wanting,
the lack of time you spent,
in sharing who I was;
in being resonant.
It wasn't that you left,
in a material sense,
but an emotional distance;
which left my soul bereft.
There was a lack of detail,
in how you treated me,
as if I were a shadow;
not someone fully real.
It had not always been this way,
nor had I felt you part,
but it did not bring fondness;
instead it broke my heart.




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ABSENCE (noun)

1
: the state of being absent
2
: the period of time that one is absent
3
: wantlack <an absence of detail>

12 comments:

  1. A compelling sense of loss, betrayal, being taken for granted (devalued)is conveyed through these words.

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  2. This writing is beautiful :D A really good response :D

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  3. I know this experience well. You described it perfectly. One day you wake up and you are emotionally alone.

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  4. Great job capturing these emotions.

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  5. A lack of details in how you treated me. Man, this is beautiful.

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  6. This is a beautiful piece and it really strikes close to home! Thank you for this.

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  7. I especially love the last four lines! So nice! :D

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  8. "There was a lack of detail..." I *love* this phrase. Beautiful!

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  9. You did describe this perfectly--that drifting, that. . .lack. Great job with the prompt. Thank you for linking up with Trifecta.

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