I found your absence wanting,
the lack of time you spent,
in sharing who I was;
in being resonant.
It wasn't that you left,
in a material sense,
but an emotional distance;
which left my soul bereft.
There was a lack of detail,
in how you treated me,
as if I were a shadow;
not someone fully real.
It had not always been this way,
nor had I felt you part,
but it did not bring fondness;
instead it broke my heart.
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ABSENCE (noun)
1
: the state of being absent
2
: the period of time that one is absent
3
: want, lack <an absence of detail>
A compelling sense of loss, betrayal, being taken for granted (devalued)is conveyed through these words.
ReplyDeleteThis writing is beautiful :D A really good response :D
ReplyDeletelovely and heartfelt.
ReplyDeleteI know this experience well. You described it perfectly. One day you wake up and you are emotionally alone.
ReplyDeleteGreat job capturing these emotions.
ReplyDeleteA lack of details in how you treated me. Man, this is beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThis is a beautiful piece and it really strikes close to home! Thank you for this.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteI especially love the last four lines! So nice! :D
ReplyDelete"There was a lack of detail..." I *love* this phrase. Beautiful!
ReplyDeleteYou did describe this perfectly--that drifting, that. . .lack. Great job with the prompt. Thank you for linking up with Trifecta.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful piece! Great job!
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