The storm of soul shook damp corners,
trapped mind within the cold, lost ash,
climbed high dead memory's mountain;
broke open pain's dry husk.
The bolts of understanding bore witness,
to all that did remain of self,
and gathered up the bundles of small hope;
to bring salvation borne on brutal winds.
bolts, shook, remain, bundles, bring, husk, climbed, ash, trapped, corners, damp, storm.
http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/
trapped mind within the cold, lost ash,
climbed high dead memory's mountain;
broke open pain's dry husk.
The bolts of understanding bore witness,
to all that did remain of self,
and gathered up the bundles of small hope;
to bring salvation borne on brutal winds.
bolts, shook, remain, bundles, bring, husk, climbed, ash, trapped, corners, damp, storm.
http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/
I loved your "storm of soul" and the bundles of small hope."
ReplyDeleteBeautiful. We cannot find our true selves, without also facing pain. This is simply... beautiful.
ReplyDeleteImpressive and very compact! I love to read these condensed wordles. :)
ReplyDeleteThe last two lines provide a respite from the soul's storm...which will likely visit again. This is a strong write. I'm glad you are with us at The Sunday Whirl.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much annell, Daydreamertoo, miskmask and undercaws.:)
DeleteCompact and full! Excellent writing! I especially liked: "climbed high dead memory's mountain"...
ReplyDeleteThank goodness salvation comes!
ReplyDeleteA Little Whirl
Think we were on a similar wavelength with these words, especially with those bundles of hope. Your description of the storm of soul is clear and vivid,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/09/23/darkening-echo/
A neat poetic expression of 'know thyself' - like a phoenix rising...each new feather of hope aides in our flight.
ReplyDeleteI'm here:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/09/sunday-whirl-75-nuts-and-bolts.html
Tight write, and quite powerful.
ReplyDeletePamela
I so admire poets that can do what you've done here - packed an emotional wallop with so very few words ... amazing wordle
ReplyDeletehttp://seingrahamsays.wordpress.com/2012/09/22/releasing-an-angel/
Powerful write. Well done.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]