Tuesday, January 28, 2014

The note

 



Thomas Leuthard / Foter.com / CC BY


I read your note,
cannot think,
words are blurred,
nothing  is retained;
doomed exams,
I'm sure.
As if you care,
later I will weep,
now I focus 
on the page;
sentiments will keep.

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9 comments:

  1. rebeccaJanuary 29, 2014 at 2:14 AM

    I liked this. Perfect for the picture given.

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  2. Lyssa MedanaJanuary 29, 2014 at 9:55 PM

    What a condensed moment LM x

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  3. AnonymousJanuary 30, 2014 at 2:38 AM

    you created a realistic moment well. i can see this really happening. nice.

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  4. Ashley KagaoanJanuary 30, 2014 at 3:08 AM

    I agree. Such a real moment. Well done.

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  5. AtreyeeJanuary 31, 2014 at 2:55 AM

    Such a realistic picture you drew with just 33 words Roslyn-loved it:-)

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  6. AnonymousJanuary 31, 2014 at 7:43 AM

    Well done - it's recogniseable, in a way:)

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  7. Thomas Charles MacInnesJanuary 31, 2014 at 11:24 AM

    Priorities! Priorities! Priorities! Keep those emotions tucked way down, deep inside. Good piece, Roslyn!

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  8. AnonymousFebruary 1, 2014 at 6:55 AM

    "Sentiments will keep." Love that - the desperate hope that burying oneself in the mundanity of life will hold those emotions at bay. Nice.

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  9. TrifectaFebruary 3, 2014 at 1:38 PM

    Oh wow, I know this feeling. It blocks out all other thought and emotion. Well conveyed.

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