A diamond kiss upon your lips,
sharp edges feeling still,
as jasmine drifted from your mouth;
heart's golden light revealed.
Your taste was drenched in perfume,
the shape rolled round my tongue,
as love lit anchored feelings;
the notes seductive hung.
In blistered, bursting moments,
the truth of all you were,
had dressed that one sweet meeting;
of flesh, of mind, of soul.
For today’s prompt, I invite you to play around with mixing up those senses. It’s not necessary to write a complete poem in synesthesia, just include an incident in which you invite your readers to taste, or see, or hear, or touch, or smell something that defies the sense you are using.
http://dversepoets.com/2013/05/30/synesthesia-sensory-confusion-or-dverse-meeting-the-bar/#respond
sharp edges feeling still,
as jasmine drifted from your mouth;
heart's golden light revealed.
Your taste was drenched in perfume,
the shape rolled round my tongue,
as love lit anchored feelings;
the notes seductive hung.
In blistered, bursting moments,
the truth of all you were,
had dressed that one sweet meeting;
of flesh, of mind, of soul.
For today’s prompt, I invite you to play around with mixing up those senses. It’s not necessary to write a complete poem in synesthesia, just include an incident in which you invite your readers to taste, or see, or hear, or touch, or smell something that defies the sense you are using.
http://dversepoets.com/2013/05/30/synesthesia-sensory-confusion-or-dverse-meeting-the-bar/#respond
Oooh sounds very nice. Lovely poem
ReplyDelete"jasmine drifted from you mouth..." very nice
ReplyDeleteblistered bursting moments...well now that is rather intense...smiles..the truth of all you were is a great line...and how much it touched...
ReplyDeleteI really like your rhythm and rhyme. Very nice. This is my favorite:
ReplyDelete"the truth of all you were,
had dressed that one sweet meeting"
i like blistered bursting moment
ReplyDeleteThis flowed so well--the rhyme and meter. Nice use of the prompt.
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ReplyDeleteGreat synesthetic qualities; nice rhyme scheme; a beauty of a poem! -Mike
ReplyDeleteSome wonderful phrases here: you have interpreted the prompt to perfection.
ReplyDeleteI love how you describe the intensity by the sharpness.. and I can recall those time it was not just soft and friendly... Diamond kisses and blistered moments... even the roses have thorns.
ReplyDeleteThe sensuality, the rhythm, the jasmine gave an exotic feel - beautiful.
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