Tuesday, June 25, 2013

Rusty


In corrugated clarion call
the metal shows its face,
revealing time's persuasion;
surrendering with grace.

In weathered welts of years
the walls and roof have shed,
the brightness of beginning;
donned rusty cloaks instead.

In pock-marked perseverance,
they stand against the sun,
brace for bitter winter nights;
know that age has come.

In weeping shred of flakes,
they drop the skin of youth,
and offer toothless hope;
the years so soon reduced.

In dulled and dusted dressing,
they hold to shape and life,
as wearied, worn, decaying;
no longer shining bright.

In days of shuddered sleeping,
they hold horizon's hand,
and echo tales forgotten;
lost part of someone's plan.

 RUSTY

3a : of the color rust  
  b : dulled in color or appearance by age and use <rusty old boots>

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10 comments:

  1. I loved this movement and rhythm in this one. Excellent write, Roslyn.

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  2. This is beautiful and melancholy. The passage of time was well visualized.

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  3. so much is beautiful in this - two of my absolute favorite phrases are . . .

    In weeping shred of flakes,
    they drop the skin of youth,

    and

    In days of shuddered sleeping,
    they hold horizon's hand,

    thanks for linking up this week.

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    1. Thanks for taking the time to comment in detail.

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  4. I do appreciate people taking the time to comment.

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  5. I love the cadence of this piece. Beautiful and a bit sad. Lovely work.

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  6. This does have a sadness to it, but so many phrases so beautifully say, "they 'ain't what they used to be." For instance, 'donning rusty cloaks' sound so much more eloquent than 'rusted out'.

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  7. BEAUTIFUL. I loved so much about this, and it's a pleasure to read it out loud too.

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  8. This is both heartwrenching and beautiful all in one. Exquisite writing.

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  9. "In weathered welts of years" - wow, great line! Really great writing throughout.

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