Monday, November 26, 2012

The scent of you

The scent of you fell listlessly,
around my mind and sight,
to fill my senses needfully;
to fleck my days with love.
The truth of you held sway,
draped slowly  round my world,
held still my aching heart;
brought end to my turmoil.
The load of flimsy hopes, 
now lay in lightened heap,
as faith skimmed doubt's
rich cream: revealed my destiny.
 


fill, scent, sway, held, fell, sight, fleck, still, end, load, skimmed, heap.

http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/2012/11/25/wordle-84/


9 comments:

  1. "The load of flimsy hopes,
    now lay in lightened heap,
    as faith skimmed doubt's
    rich cream: revealed my destiny."

    Wonderful use of two words I found absolutely impossible to use, Roslyn. Nice poem.

    Pamela

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    1. Thanks. There were some tricky ones in this selection. If in doubt reach for metaphor.

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  2. Doubt's rich cream! Good imagery! Well done for getting the words into such a compact verse!

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  3. Nice... I especially like the ending.

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  4. "to fleck my days with love" suggests that there's a paucity of love. Is there?

    My Whirling Wordle Words

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    1. Good point. But fleck is also decorative - flecked cloth, flecked fabric - flecks appear in great numbers so I don't see it as negative.

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  5. Almost reminds me of someone waiting for their partner to return from an extended absence. And the anticipation of reunion.

    I'm hoping next weeks list will allow for a more detailed meeting of my characters :)

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  6. oh, mysterious and sensual, well done.

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