Breath held, drawn in
and down .... slow ...
becoming of deep
thought, waiting ...
to be released, upon
an unsuspecting...
world, in that silence
which holds court
for soul's full and
liquid language, as
it roils ..... in doubt
and hope, before it
can be ...revealed.
In silence all things
....are born.
https://dversepoets.com/2018/01/04/meet-the-bar-with-silence/
and down .... slow ...
becoming of deep
thought, waiting ...
to be released, upon
an unsuspecting...
world, in that silence
which holds court
for soul's full and
liquid language, as
it roils ..... in doubt
and hope, before it
can be ...revealed.
In silence all things
....are born.
https://dversepoets.com/2018/01/04/meet-the-bar-with-silence/
The use of ellipsises works so well here... really great to add that hesitation between the words. That's the kind of silence I was after
ReplyDeleteSo well crafted! The best spot is right before the word 'revealed.' Very effective.
ReplyDeleteNice work here--by the time I reached the end of the poem, I really felt like everything had slowed down and gone quiet. Also really enjoyed the "liquid language."
ReplyDeleteI like the part about holding court in silence and roiling.
ReplyDeletebeautiful poem,read in silence,speaks....
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