Rain roils like fire in flaming torrents,
sucking in the air, devouring vision,
thundering crackle, consuming distance,
sodden smoking of nature's breath;
so do the heavens serenade the sighing
soil, drenching barren fear, sluicing
away the doubts of dying season, in
unexpected baring of glistening teeth,
lined at Winter's long-dried mouth,
where voice of hope had been silenced,
flattened by dry, hard days and thirsty
nights, not even a sigh of dusty words,
as time surrendered to the certainty
of hopelessness, of looming death,
of crackled steps, wasted growth; until
that sudden moment when Life laughed
at Death, in glorious watered smile.
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Such a dramatic description that ripples with flexing verbs, Roslyn. I particular love:
ReplyDelete'sucking in the air, devouring vision,
thundering crackle, consuming distance',
'...drenching barren fear, sluicing
away the doubts of dying season';
and
'that sudden moment when Life laughed
at Death, in glorious watered smile'.
"so do the heavens serenade the sighing / soil,"...This is such a beauty! Love this.
ReplyDeleteWow...i can't choose any particular line as favorite...each line is beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteI love your rain poem, and 'the heavens serenading the sighing sighing soil', is one of my favourite lines. I can just picture that actually, well done!
ReplyDeleteThat fire/rain metaphor/conflation works really well.
ReplyDeleteThanks to everyone who popped in to read and left a comment. Much appreciated.
ReplyDeleteThose angry verbs were so powerful, I wasn't sure there'd be a happy ending. Very moving!
ReplyDeleteI like that watery smile from life laughing at death with the dry season being over.
ReplyDeleteDrought as a muse; cool. You aced the prompt, flexing verbs with apparent ease--a terrific poem emerged. I liked the line /not even a sigh of dusty words/ As others have pointed out, there are many other lines that could be/have been singled out.
ReplyDeleteThe first line totally drew me in - amazing poem using drought and rain as metaphors/muses.
ReplyDeletedying season, in
ReplyDeleteunexpected baring of glistening teeth,
lined at Winter's long-dried mouth,
Yes!